whitesymphonia's audio Reviews on Newgrounds

[Carnivorous Carnival_Full]

Ah... Finally!

Been waiting for this to come out, and it hasn't fallen short of my expectations.

I think your change at :45ish couldve been incorportated more into the last few seconds. It was like a brief section, then just disappeared for good. Would've liked to hear an expansion on that.

Brilliant composition!
When ya gonna stop making loops and make song? :D Would love to hear a full-fledged song.

SirKoto51 responds:

I'm gonna be honest, I think I'm a loop writer and not a song writer. The big thing is, i kinda get and idea and add stuff onto it, you're absolutely right, this needs more than just a loop. I might work on it! :D

[I'm in (a) space]

awesome!

definitely one of my more favorite ambiances.

The starting part, before the piano is introduced was too favourable, but after that I loved it. The part @ 2:36 isn't as good as the first part in my opinion.

@2:40 - just great. reminds me of one of the tracks from avatar.

@3:23 - not really feeling the transition, I don't really how it pulled from the original theme. loved how it transitions back though

@3:39ish, i like the transition back into the main theme (mood) with the introduction of another instrument

@4:42 - just a sucker for this guitar part. Loving the sound of the strings.

I think it's pretty finalized already. I would love to hear the final if you do make it. Till then, this is on my favorites as a placeholder.

mjattie responds:

Well, thank you! Avatar is nice :P

I'm not to fond of the drums around 4:05 the guitar part, so I'm going to update that. Thanks WhiteSymphonia

[Cast Away By DJ Mathmatik]

Sooooo Good!

Love this!.

It gives off such a good happy vibe to it, till 1:21ish.

After that, I like the relaxation. Not sure if it's a guitar or what, but that part is very, very relaxing to me.

There's apart at 2:38 that I don't like, it just sounds like a random interjections. Totally digging it!

Math368 responds:

Good Looking out, I will soon repost a more edited version, I just been real busy lately but I will do it.

[Mistress of Egypt-RAC WIP]

yup, definitely that egypt feel.

it definitely has that mysterious feel of egypt to it. I dunno what the entry is for, but if it's for some movie-type thing, I think you should get rid of the drum/bass. That gives it a more modern feel, pulling away from the egyptian/seductive feel.

I think that around 01:56, the feel you were aiming for is kind of lost, and it transitions into something closer to dance.

@02:30, I like this melody a lot! but I'm not sure if it really contributes to the egyptian feel. it still redeems the mysterious feel, but the egyptian part is lost.

I think basically after 02:00, you start to lose the feeling you were aiming for. I think continuing the use of the instrument @ 01:00 would be good (pipe organ?).

Either way, very envious of you ability to write "egyptian" songs :)

zomgkerrie responds:

thanks so much! i get what you are saying! this is for the Represent a Country contest run by NeonProject. I know i have some more work on this but your comments helped a lot! thanks!

[Haunted Fairy Manor]

creepy! :D

whoa, definitely the creepy feel is there.
The bells bring it out very nicely.

I think you should do something different than a variation of the "Dance of the Sugarplum Faries", especially since you want to make it into a short. Unless the theme of the short is something similar, otherwise I'd say go with something else.

I don't like how after 1:01 the bells just continue by itself. To me, it's just repetitive and boring.

Would love to see your short when you finish it! Maybe PM me a link?

ps2sony responds:

Thanx for the review and criticism,my animation will be an xmas/horror type project and I felt the little bit would be perfect for a scene in it

[Cutting the edge(Ft)(Kok)]

love the intro!

I love the intro! but I think later you change the feeling a bit. I'd say around 00:15, maybe you changed keys or something?

It's a shame it's only the beginning since I'd like to hear the whole thing.

also
@ around 00:36, the sound dies down for one track. It makes me think that it's ending, but the same melody continues on. I'd suggest changing the melody at this portion instead of waiting a bit longer (like the 4,5 seconds before you change it).

kodyakoo responds:

Thanks! the first 15 seconds i had the cross filter effect to start it off so that's why the sound changed

[Carnival Day]

Very Cheery!

Works great for carnival music, I was thinking something along the lines of a fair actually.

It gives off a good feel, but I think you should have more of a melody. It's there, but maybe since it's so short, you can't really feel it that much.

@ 0:07 you introduce another track to it. I think that this track need editing. Sometimes it plays out well and blends nicely with the melody, but other times I feel like it's being deconstructive and making it sound like noise.

Other than that, it's all good :)

EraldoCoil responds:

Thanks for the review, Symphonia! I just chose 'carnival' because it's simply a cooler and more fun-to-say word. I noticed what you meant the melody; I'll try to fix that sometime.

Oh, and the other track is introduced at 0:06, actually (but that's beside the point). I'll try to fix this as well.

I appreciate your criticism greatly. Thanks for taking the time to notice both the pros and cons of the song. This review is exactly what I want to see in any review, actually.

Thank you!!

- ~ K o i r u - k u n ~ -

[Blue Umbrella]

sounds like DDR material

not really sure on why you named it blue umbrella, but I like the song.

really like the track that layers over the main melody at 1:21.

the change at 2:00ish sounds a lot off from the main melody. I dunno if you're going for a chorus type of thing, so it's different from the main melody, but i'm just feeling like it's out of place. no solid logic, just a feeling. your return to the main melody @3:13 is pretty good.

good song, i like it!

C0ldFuzi0n responds:

Heh, yeah. On previous attempts I kept getting comments that everything was a little too repetitive, so this time I went for a pretty drastic change just to see what would happen, lol.

[Mischief At The Dock]

oooo, mysterious, i like it.

front reminds me of the pink panther theme, dunno why since it's just a ringing sound.

the reeds(?) help set the mood, which I think is great. A kinda shady/black market/underground mood.

@0:50, i think the second track that enters interferes with the original melody at some parts. you might want to look it over again. other than that it fits rather nicely.

If it's going to be a loop, I think the ending should loop back to the beginning, for the sake of working well in-game.

Great track!

sgste responds:

[EDIT]
The track has been fixed. I hope you enjoy it that little bit more now. ^__^